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All flags come back to Hawthorn gifts. I reckon 63 was a charity day too. Let them have a flag we said
Even their first premiership was won because we deigned to finally join the league that year.
 
Terrific article. I noticed two paragraphs started with the world 'after', which jarred with me. I liked that there was a detailed narrative that felt like I hadn't missed any part of the recent CJ story.
It felt like I was hearing from a witness to these events rather than writing based on 2nd hand info (as is the case I am sure).

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I also think you can avoid a few tautological phrases here and there. 'Enter into' can just be left as 'enter' and in the last paragraph, you talk about CJ putting himself forward for the seasons opener against last years grand finalists, the Sydney Swans, in the opening round of the AFL season'. Everything after Sydney Swans is redundant and can just be left out, I reckon, because you've already established it's the opening round.
 
I also think you can avoid a few tautological phrases here and there. 'Enter into' can just be left as 'enter' and in the last paragraph, you talk about CJ putting himself forward for the seasons opener against last years grand finalists, the Sydney Swans, in the opening round of the AFL season'. Everything after Sydney Swans is redundant and can just be left out, I reckon, because you've already established it's the opening round.

'Enter into' or 'entering into' is not a tautology and was a correct use of English the way Newmo89 included it in the article.
 
'Enter into' or 'entering into' is not a tautology and was a correct use of English the way Newmo89 included it in the
Entering into his 9th season says the same thing as entering his 9th season. What does 'into' add here? How do you enter anything without going into it?!

Anyway I'm sure most readers of this thread aren't interested in a grammar debate so happy to leave the last response to you so we don't clog the real conversation with this stuff!
 
Entering into his 9th season says the same thing as entering his 9th season. What does 'into' add here? How do you enter anything without going into it?!

Anyway I'm sure most readers of this thread aren't interested in a grammar debate so happy to leave the last response to you so we don't clog the real conversation with this stuff!

There is a difference between the two statements and Newmo89 used it correctly - don't believe me, feel free to google it. As someone on a writing forum put it succinctly:

To summarise:
enter can normally replace go into/come into (example: he went into/entered the room). This refers to a location. But it could be joining a process that is already going on (example: he was late in entering the discussion).

enter into can mean to start/embark on/conclude (example: France entered into a treaty with Algeria (alternatives: concluded/agreed/made a treaty).
 

I recently joined Zero Hanger as a writer and this is my first piece for them. Have a read and let me know what you think. Would love some feedback.

Good article mate, i enjoyed reading it inside knowledge always help.

CJ is like so many players on our list, who can play mutiple roles.
I dare say he will get first crack in the side in the pre season.

As a defender or the defensive hard running winger is up for debate.

If he plays back i expect to see Amon go back to the wing rotating with D'Ambrosio.
The other wing comes down to the team structure Cj,Wedddle,Finn could all play the role.
Ward is the other solid option, that could be asked to play inside or out.
 

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